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12-13-2002, 12:37 PM
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Aikido Haiku
So, anyone want to try composing some aikido haiku?
-- Jun
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12-13-2002, 12:41 PM
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Yokomen Uchi
stumble stumble step step step
irimi nage
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12-13-2002, 12:48 PM
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very big ego
kindly invited to train
lovingly humbled
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12-13-2002, 01:05 PM
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Dojo: West End Aikikai
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live in Harmony
O'Sensei calls us to lead
in Spirit of Love
DA
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12-13-2002, 01:41 PM
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Sitting all in line
invited to be uke
toe in hakama
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12-13-2002, 02:23 PM
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Dojo: Messores Sensei (Largo, Fl.)
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Erik Jurrien Knoops (erikknoops) wrote:
Sitting all in line
invited to be uke
toe in hakama
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You, Mr. Knoops, have a future in text!
Thanks for the laughs.
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12-13-2002, 02:32 PM
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Dojo: West End Aikikai
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round and round we flow
one, two - iriminage
where did sensei go?
DA
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12-13-2002, 02:41 PM
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Dojo: West End Aikikai
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our aikido is
all about the perception -
use your eyes, goofball
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12-13-2002, 02:46 PM
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Tape, bandaids, Advil
Asthma inhalor, knee brace
Now....ready for class....
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12-13-2002, 02:48 PM
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Dojo: West End Aikikai
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sh*t! I lean again
sensei sees me across mat
"please!, no buttwaza!"
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12-13-2002, 02:54 PM
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I've almost got it -
arm here, direct hara there
I'm first through the door!
DA
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12-13-2002, 03:02 PM
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Dojo: West End Aikikai
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fencing trains to kill -
aikido reminds me to
transform the anger
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12-13-2002, 09:31 PM
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Dojo: Ontario Martial Arts
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Tsuki
Kotegaeshi
Ceiling
Satori!
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12-14-2002, 05:33 AM
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Location: Taipei, Taiwan
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haiku basics
As far as I know, there are some basic rules for haiku.
Haiku is composed of three lines. The first and third lines contain 5 syllables. The second line contains 7 syllables.
No direct references to self are made; i.e. "I, me, my, we," etc. I think this is because references to self indicate self-centeredness.
Something in the poem usually indicates the season in which it was written.
Example:
Last moon of the year
Swirling wind sweeps leaves off street
Cold dojo awaits
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12-14-2002, 08:23 AM
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Re: haiku basics
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Mike Lee (mike lee) wrote:
As far as I know, there are some basic rules for haiku.
Haiku is composed of three lines. The first and third lines contain 5 syllables. The second line contains 7 syllables.
No direct references to self are made; i.e. "I, me, my, we," etc. I think this is because references to self indicate self-centeredness.
Something in the poem usually indicates the season in which it was written.
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Yes, absolutly right. These are the rules for writting a haiku.
The first and the last are considered traditional. 17 syllables divided in three groups, 5, 7, 5. Inclusion of a kigo, a word of season. The latter can be interpreted very loosely, as one can already see in some of the poetry of Basho.
The second rule is due to proposed reform in the form of haiku by Masaoka Shiki and Kawahigashi Hekigoto, which include:
1) No reference to a center of interest (to make it truer to reality)
2) Emphasis on importance of the poet's (first) impression to the subject as it was, and therefor creating freshness by using subject of daily life and local colour.
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12-16-2002, 09:49 AM
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There are some really good haiku writers out there!
Any others want to tackle writing some aikido haiku?
-- Jun
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12-16-2002, 11:16 AM
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Dojo: aikido of shreveport
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"I want to kick butt!"
Says the visitor, I say,
"Fine, Seiza, one hour."
Great Kami, join me.
Weight underside, extend KI.
Worst foe, Angry Wife.
Lighting in dark
Sky flowing life force, beauty.
Take Misu Ai...
Last edited by Williamross77 : 12-16-2002 at 11:20 AM.
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in Aiki
Agatsu!!
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12-16-2002, 11:35 AM
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Dojo: Fredericton Aikido Dojo
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Enter from the North
Flow like Water into Ice
Iriminage
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12-16-2002, 12:42 PM
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Gold flecked waves languish
Shores warmed by sleep-setting sun
Sensei, dream you still?
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12-16-2002, 12:45 PM
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The poem below breaks the rules, but as it evoked a haiku-like moment when I wrote it, I include it here. It is in honor of my late teacher, Fumio Toyoda Shihan:
"Katsu"
among the gnarled woods,
‘neath plodding feet, by dying light
lie leaves, nodding and grey;
a clutching sleep.
One cut, Sensei;
Lightning cleaves the dim.
morning mist on blue-black pond;
cranes lull among the reeds.
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Paul Smith
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12-16-2002, 02:48 PM
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Dojo: aikido of shreveport
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sorry about the references to the self, just jumping into the world of my head.
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in Aiki
Agatsu!!
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12-16-2002, 03:01 PM
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Dojo: 合気研究会
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My first attempt... is it OK?
Hot winds of summer
Aiki, the balance, will be
Cool breeze of autumn
Last edited by Thalib : 12-16-2002 at 03:04 PM.
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12-16-2002, 03:59 PM
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That was realy fun
Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha
how uke bounced
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12-16-2002, 04:06 PM
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Uke had pizza
He's lactose intolerant
Thunder in springtime 
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12-16-2002, 04:21 PM
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Dojo: 合気研究会
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The mind distracted
Searching for the voice behind
Got hit on the head
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