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Old 07-31-2009, 01:53 PM   #1
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During a six-month poetry-writing stay in St. Petersburg, FL, I wrote a few dozen. This is one of my top ten favorites that I wrote. I submitted my works to many medium to highly exclusive journals, even Poetry and The New Yorker. I have read The New York Quartery, Poetry, The New Yorker, and Best American Poetry - 2008. What I've discovered is that my style is much different from the current mainstream. I like writing poems that take the reader from A to B, and he/she hopefully has a fun ride. What's considered great poetry these days is usually depressing and takes 20 reads to understand, if even then. So, here I go:


Approaching the tree of fertility, I frightened away
Two emerald-plumed parrots who failed to trust their camouflage;
Maybe they were digging beaks into the world's ultimate food.
Some avocados still clung above,
Then one dropped down with a resounding thump.
I thought of Newton who preferred apples.
A bulkier fruit would have dented his crown
And surely rendered him unconscious for a moment.

Upon awakening he would have made
Guacamole instead of gravityŚ
A resume would fade to paler green.
Yet another inquisitive spirit might have found
Shade beneath cherry blossoms in spring,
Where pink petals abound, surround, descend.
A mystery embraces the threshold of solution.

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Old 08-02-2009, 05:32 PM   #2
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Re: Poetry

Ever been to editred.com ?
I've posted around there. It is a good network site if you avoid the crazies and the hacks.
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Old 08-02-2009, 10:01 PM   #3
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Re: Poetry

Interesting! :O)

~Look into the eyes of your opponent & steal his spirit.
~To be a good martial artist is to be good thief; if you want my knowledge, you must take it from me.
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Old 08-03-2009, 06:09 AM   #4
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Re: Poetry

Drew that's a really nice one. Took a couple of reads for my tired brain to fully grasp but I liked the word plays.

I enjoy writing poetry as well.
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