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Old 12-13-2002, 12:37 PM   #1
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Aikido Haiku

So, anyone want to try composing some aikido haiku?

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Old 12-13-2002, 12:41 PM   #2
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Yokomen Uchi

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Old 12-13-2002, 12:48 PM   #3
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very big ego

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Old 12-13-2002, 01:05 PM   #4
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Old 12-13-2002, 01:41 PM   #5
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Sitting all in line

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toe in hakama

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Old 12-13-2002, 02:23 PM   #6
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Quote:
Erik Jurrien Knoops (erikknoops) wrote:
Sitting all in line

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toe in hakama
You, Mr. Knoops, have a future in text!

Thanks for the laughs.

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Old 12-13-2002, 02:32 PM   #7
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Old 12-13-2002, 02:41 PM   #8
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Old 12-13-2002, 02:46 PM   #9
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Old 12-13-2002, 02:48 PM   #10
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Old 12-13-2002, 02:54 PM   #11
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Old 12-13-2002, 03:02 PM   #12
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Old 12-13-2002, 09:31 PM   #13
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Old 12-14-2002, 05:33 AM   #14
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haiku basics

As far as I know, there are some basic rules for haiku.

Haiku is composed of three lines. The first and third lines contain 5 syllables. The second line contains 7 syllables.

No direct references to self are made; i.e. "I, me, my, we," etc. I think this is because references to self indicate self-centeredness.

Something in the poem usually indicates the season in which it was written.

Example:

Last moon of the year

Swirling wind sweeps leaves off street

Cold dojo awaits
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Old 12-14-2002, 08:23 AM   #15
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Re: haiku basics

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Mike Lee (mike lee) wrote:
As far as I know, there are some basic rules for haiku.

Haiku is composed of three lines. The first and third lines contain 5 syllables. The second line contains 7 syllables.

No direct references to self are made; i.e. "I, me, my, we," etc. I think this is because references to self indicate self-centeredness.

Something in the poem usually indicates the season in which it was written.
Yes, absolutly right. These are the rules for writting a haiku.

The first and the last are considered traditional. 17 syllables divided in three groups, 5, 7, 5. Inclusion of a kigo, a word of season. The latter can be interpreted very loosely, as one can already see in some of the poetry of Basho.

The second rule is due to proposed reform in the form of haiku by Masaoka Shiki and Kawahigashi Hekigoto, which include:

1) No reference to a center of interest (to make it truer to reality)

2) Emphasis on importance of the poet's (first) impression to the subject as it was, and therefor creating freshness by using subject of daily life and local colour.

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Old 12-16-2002, 09:49 AM   #16
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There are some really good haiku writers out there!

Any others want to tackle writing some aikido haiku?

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Old 12-16-2002, 11:16 AM   #17
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Says the visitor, I say,

"Fine, Seiza, one hour."


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Old 12-16-2002, 11:35 AM   #18
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Enter from the North

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Old 12-16-2002, 12:42 PM   #19
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Gold flecked waves languish

Shores warmed by sleep-setting sun

Sensei, dream you still?

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Old 12-16-2002, 12:45 PM   #20
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The poem below breaks the rules, but as it evoked a haiku-like moment when I wrote it, I include it here. It is in honor of my late teacher, Fumio Toyoda Shihan:

"Katsu"

among the gnarled woods,

‘neath plodding feet, by dying light

lie leaves, nodding and grey;

a clutching sleep.

One cut, Sensei;

Lightning cleaves the dim.

morning mist on blue-black pond;

cranes lull among the reeds.

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Old 12-16-2002, 02:48 PM   #21
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sorry about the references to the self, just jumping into the world of my head.

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Old 12-16-2002, 03:01 PM   #22
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My first attempt... is it OK?

Hot winds of summer

Aiki, the balance, will be

Cool breeze of autumn

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Old 12-16-2002, 03:59 PM   #23
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That was realy fun

Ha ha ha ha ha ha ha

how uke bounced

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Old 12-16-2002, 04:06 PM   #24
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Uke had pizza

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