Quote:
Jessica Tackett wrote:
uke's this is for you
I know an uke or two,
who know just what to do.
When you throw them down,
they pop off the ground
and come right back to you!
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OK...I'm sorry, but in a limerick, the meter is the most important thing. Every syllable counts and the rhythm has to be smooth.
Here's the pattern
da-DA-da da-DA-da da-DA-da
da-DA-da da-DA-da da-DA-da
da-DA-da da-DA
da-DA-da da-DA
da-DA-da da-DA-da da-DA-da
A real classic:
There was a young woman named Bright
whose speed was much faster than light.
She set out one day
in a relative way
And returned on the previous night.
In that one, the author sort of squeezes "and returned" into the rhythm of just "returned" but it fits very naturally.
And then there's the classic Nantucket verse:
There once was a man from Nantucket
who kept all his eggs in a bucket...
Or was that how it goes?
Anyway, the meter is what defines a limerick. If you miss that, it simply isn't a limerick.
Otherwise, good sentiments, but I wonder if we could do better.
(For non-native-speakers of English, don't worry. Nice try.)
Best wishes.
David